“After a line-of-duty incident puts him in a wheelchair, bitter war veteran Horse befriends a rough sixteen-year-old girl and is thrust into her world of sleaze and drugs. When she gets in over her head with a drug dealer, he must overcome his fears and disability if he hopes to save her.”
This screenplay features a fantastic sense of authenticity, sharp dialogue, and extraordinarily well drawn characters. The writer is clearly comfortable with his craft and shapes a compelling and heartfelt story from the effective opening sequence to the poignant and hope-filled final scene. Many readers will be struck by the author’s strong sense of detail that never overwhelms. Character introductions especially are tight yet evocative. In fact, the overall storytelling feels impressively tight, and features a nice balance of seriousness and levity.
But it’s in the characterization and dialogue that the screenplay truly shines. Not one line feels inauthentic or out of place, and the characters feel immensely rich and true to themselves but also their life experience. Horse and Macy, of course, are both admirable creations, and are both interesting but also empathetic. Readers will instantly connect with these two lost souls driven together by fate. The screenplay also successfully provides heartfelt and effective commentary about preconceived notions of disabled people, without forcing the issue on the audience. So on the whole, this is a decidedly impressive overall effort that showcases a writer with a great voice and a lot of potential.
BS – Script Shark Analyst
This script is an original and touching drama that takes its three dimensional characters on a journey that will change them for the better. The dialogue is fun yet feels natural, adding to the sense of the characters’ “realness.” It is easy to see that the writer has a way with words, and makes excellent use of imagery… The writer uses conflict effectively, dashing every success with an even greater failure, until the end. The greatest aspect of this script is the incredibly clear character arc of the main protagonists.
– Judges notes, BlueCat screenplay contest 2014.